The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among UK residents in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories

among UK residents in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar above illustrates the percentage of UK
residents
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resident's
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total spending in 2004 on 3 categories, food and drink, restaurant and hotel, and entertainment. The data describe
expenditure
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expenditures
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that vary among 5 types of age ranges.
Overal
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, there is no general trend but we can see that
the
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older
citizen
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citizens
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consume
higher
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more
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food and drink rather than the younger. In
addiotion
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addition
, the
noticable
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noticeable
information from the data is the
sharply
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difference among the consumption at range 61-75. People with age more than 76 hits the peak of spending up 20%, similar
with
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the need
of
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entertainment at the age range 61-75.
This
is the highest number of expenditure in 2004. People under 30 prefer to
choose
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pay more for
restaurant
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restaurants
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and
hotel
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hotels
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.
In contrast
, people
coming
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from 61-
75
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to 75
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years old do not see that it is
important
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thing, their cost only
reach
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a little higher
from
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zero.
Furthermore
, from the percentage among 31-
45 years old
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45-year-old
residents, there
is
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slightly
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differences towards the categories of food-drink and restaurant-hotel.
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