Some businesses now say that no one can smoke cigarettes in their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in public places. Overall this is a very good idea. To what extent do you agree?
Smoking has been becoming
an essential health issues
in recent days, and has Correct the article-noun agreement
an essential health issue
essential health issues
bad
impact both Add an article
a bad
direct
and indirect Change preposition
in direct
way
on individuals. At that Fix the agreement mistake
ways
point
there comes a question to the mind that: whether banning smoking in offices and public places should be accepted as a good idea or not. It can easily stated that in order to protect Add a comma
point,
non-smokers
from the adverse effects of cigarette
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cigarettes
,
and motivate smokers Remove the comma
apply
ending of
their smoking habits, smoking should be banned in offices and shared Verb problem
to end
areas
.
Firstly
, one of the reasons why smoking should not be allowed in the
shared Correct article usage
apply
areas
is,
the adverse effects of cigars on Remove the comma
apply
non-smokers
. Imagine that
an Correct word choice
apply
office
environment, where employees smoke
while
working, due to
the Change preposition
apply
smoke
office
's air will be polluted and non-smokers
would
Verb problem
will become
annoy
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annoyed
from
the Change preposition
by
smoke
and they
may lose their concentration on their tasks. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Furthermore
, they may suffer from allergies and diseases related to Correct article usage
the respiratuar
respiratuar
system, including asthma and COAH. In Correct your spelling
respiratory
respirator
compariosn
with another Correct your spelling
comparison
office
, which
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in which
people
are not allowed to smoke
during work time, the first company’s worker's efficiency may decrease due to
the foggy working area. To sum up
, since smoke
a cigarette may disturb Wrong verb form
smoking
non-smokers
and lead to some health concerns, people
should smoke
at
outside Change preposition
apply
instead
of at the office
.
On the other hand
, banning smoking at
shared Change preposition
in
areas
may motivate people
to stop to smoke
. Let’s think a man, who has to go outside in order to smoke
, he
will, inevitably, find Correct pronoun usage
apply
hard
to go outside Correct pronoun usage
it hard
especially
Add the comma(s)
, especially
in
cold winter days. Compared to smoking inside, having an obligation to go out may promote individuals about Change preposition
on
quiting
smoking. Correct your spelling
quitting
As a consequence
, this
process may result in a decline in the number of smokers in the country, and even across the globe. To wrap up, one should always keep in mind that as long as smoking bans at
Change preposition
in
the
shared Correct article usage
apply
areas
, it could be turned into a challenging activity. Hence
, people
would lose their eagers about smoking.
To conclude
, when all the things are taken into account, as long as smoking bannes
at shared places like offices and Correct your spelling
bans
banners
banned
people
’s willing may drop in time. In order to protect non-smokers
from the bad impact of smoke
, and promote
Verb problem
encourage
people
to stop to
Wrong verb form
smoking
smoke
, authorities should be
ban the use of Unnecessary verb
apply
cigarrettes
Correct your spelling
cigarettes
at
public places.Change preposition
in
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