The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among UK residents in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories

among UK residents in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart below illustrates the citizen's expenditure in the UK
categoriez
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category
in 5 age groups in 2004.
Overall
, the data shows the older the
citizen
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citizens
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, the more they need food and drink. The expenditure
of
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on
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food and drink when the UK resident was under 30 was about 6%
percent
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.
Then
, the spending of it increased gradually
at
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23%
as
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a peak when they were over 76
years
old.
On the other hand
, the need
of
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for
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entertainment and
restaurant
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restaurants
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&
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and hotel
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hotel
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hotels
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fluctuated among
that
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those
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ages. When they were under 30, the total spending
of
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on
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restaurant
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restaurants
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&
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and hotel
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hotel
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hotels
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was 14%,
then
minimally
decline
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declined
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at
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to
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12% when they were 31-60
years
old. The need
of
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that
then
dropped
at
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only 2% when the citizens at the ages of 61-75 and slightly jumped
at
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7% after that age. Meanwhile, the spending
of
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entertainment
got
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was
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6% when the
citizen
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citizens
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was
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were
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under 30
years
old.
On
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the following ages, that spending got a peak at 23% in the group of 61-75
years
old and sharply jumped down at just 7%
at
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in
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the group of over 76
years
old.
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