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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among UK residents in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among UK residents in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart shows citizens'
expenditure
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 in the UK in three categories - food and drink, restaurant and hotel, and entertainment.
Overall
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, citizens aged more than 30 tend to spend their money on food and drink.
Additionally
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, entertainment
expenditure
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also
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 increases as the
age
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group
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 gets older.
However
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, the tendency to spend expenses on
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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 decreases when people's
age
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 is high. Specifically,
expenditure
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about
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on
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restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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 is significantly lower between the 61 and 75
age
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group
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, indicating around 3 per cent.
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, spending money on entertainment in the same
age
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group
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 reached more than 20 per cent.
This
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 percentage are same with the
age
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group
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 more 76, who spend their money on food and drink. Meanwhile, the
group
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 of under 30 marked the lowest percentage of total spending.
To sum up
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,
this
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 chart shows that there are deviations regarding using citizen's
expenditure
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 among the
age
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 groups in the UK.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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