The two graph show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.
The two pie
chart
below indicate the major sources of energy in the USA in a decade.
Fix the agreement mistake
charts
Overall
, the data shows that fossil fuel as oil, natural gas, and coal has a Linking Words
large
proportion than Correct word choice
larger
another
Correct quantifier usage
other
power
resources like hydroelectric and nuclear Use synonyms
power
.
The percentage of oil in 1980 was 42% Use synonyms
in
which Change preposition
apply
it
was the largest main energy Correct pronoun usage
apply
resouces
followed by natural gas and coal at 26% and 22%. Correct your spelling
resource
On the other hand
, the Linking Words
portion
of hydroelectric and nuclear Correct your spelling
proportion
power
in that year was just 5%. In the next decade, the percentage of oil declined to 33%, but it was still the biggest major of energy resources in the US. It Use synonyms
was
Change to the active voice
also happened
has also happened
also
happened Linking Words
on
natural gas which dropped slightly by 25%. Meanwhile, Change preposition
in
the
coal Correct article usage
apply
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
considerable
increased to 27% in Change the adjective
considerably
1990s
same as nuclear Correct article usage
the 1990s
power
which climbed its portion to 10% at that time. The one which Use synonyms
remain
steady was hydroelectric Wrong verb form
remained
power
at just 5%.Use synonyms
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