the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities.

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The column chart illustrates how Australians bought and drank

coffee

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and tea in

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last

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4 weeks in five cities, based on the results of a survey.

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, it is evident that buying fresh

coffee

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among

people

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in Australia

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is less popular. Most

city

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dwellers went to a café for

coffee

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or tea and in just one

city

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people

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mostly bought instant

coffee

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in comparison with others. It can be observed from the chart that Australians were less interested in buying fresh

coffee

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. Most of the

city

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dwellers who bought fresh

coffee

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4 weeks

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are living in Sydney and the corresponding figure is roughly 43%.

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, the percentages of Brisbane and Adelaide residents who are drawn to drinking fresh

coffee

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, are the lowest at just under 35%.

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, except

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people

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who live in Adelaide, most Australians

went

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to a café in order to have a cup of

coffee

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or tea. The highest proportion of

people

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with

this

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habit

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stood at approximately 63%, and is associated with two cities, Melbourne and Hobart. Interestingly, Adelaide is the only

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where its residents, nearly 50% of them, preferred to buy instant

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people, city with synonyms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

191 words

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