Do you thing the advantages of driverless vehicle outweigh the disadvantages?

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many
people
think that using
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a drverless
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drverless
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driverless
vehicle
is useful
while
others say that it is not. I
personaly
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personally
think that driverless
vehicle
gives more unsafe
feelling
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feeling
and it costs more money.
to begin
with, one of
incredible
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invention
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inventions
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is
driverless
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a driverless
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vehicle
and it is used to transport
people
and products. it helps to simplify tasks and save time and
this
leads to
efficiency
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works
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work
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. using
this
vehicle
, companies tend to have more profit but they have
small
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number of
people
who work for them. in terms of
driver
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,
car
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a car
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without
the
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driver is a big attempt but sometimes it
shoud
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should
be
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questioned the
savety
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safety
. when automation is used to take over human tasks, it might be
succes
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success
but when it relates to human life
then
it cannot be
garanteed
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guaranteed
the
savety
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safety
.
for example
,
people
can take control in
certain
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a certain
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situation
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situations
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and for
them
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those
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who have
masterd
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mastered
they
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apply
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know what to do when comes to
dengerous
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dangerous
conditions.
This
also
leads to
decrease
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a decrease
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manual
labors
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labor
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while
workers need
suplay
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supply
for
living
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a living
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.
For instance
, in some
companies
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companies,
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they cut off some officers because they have automation to replace them.
to sum up
,
driveless
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driverless
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vehicle
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vehicles
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bring small positive
impact
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impacts
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then
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than
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the
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apply
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negative ones.
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Ensure your essay has a clear introduction stating your position, main body paragraphs with clear topic sentences, and a concise conclusion summarising your views. Your position on the prompt is a bit unclear.
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