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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A number of people believe that everybody should accept their bad situation,
for instance
, a job which is not the one you want or lack of money
while
 others believe it is much better to try and develop these kinds of situations. I am a person who is never satisfied and always desires for better.
That is
 why, I am totally against the thought of being glad and thankful in unpleased situations. First of all, I would like to say that of course being grateful is not something that makes people pathetic. What I mean is we should always want better for ourselves. I believe
that is
 the only way to innovate ourselves and reach success. Speaking of which, as I said, I have always wanted so many things for myself like language education or doing an internship overseas and that passion made me an eminent Veterinarian.
Secondly
, to make development, people need to reach perfectness. From my point of view, nobody can get victory by accepting the situation they have. For
this
, the keywords are hardworking and ambitious. If you are,
for example
, a teacher, you must work hard to be the best tutor ever.
For example
, could Edison invent a lamp if he would be okay with his failure or do you think could someone get a pay raise by embracing their salary? All in all, it seems to me that
although
 being pleased with our situation is not something bad, we always should try our best.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear logical structure by using paragraphs effectively to separate your ideas. Each paragraph should contain one clear main idea followed by an explanation or example.
coherence cohesion
Include both an introduction and conclusion in your essay. The introduction should clearly present the topic and your thesis, while the conclusion should summarize your arguments and restate your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Develop supporting points with relevant examples or further explanation. The essay should contain specific examples that are directly related to the points made, to strengthen the argument.
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Address all parts of the task with a balanced discussion of both views and a clear personal stance. Your essay should include an explanation of the reasons behind each view and your own perspective.
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Clarify and expand your ideas to fully develop your response. Aim for comprehensive paragraphs where the main idea is supported by detailed reasoning or examples.
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Use examples that are specific, relevant, and insightful to support your arguments effectively. Quotes, facts, or personal experiences can provide a strong base for your points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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