The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graph illustrates the
amount
of 2 types of citizens who would prefer to visit Caribbean
island
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islands
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over the 7
years
.
Overall
, the
number
of both
of
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groups witnessed a steady growth from 2010 to 2017.
Initially
,
given
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the
amount
of visitors who
staying
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on cruise ships
was
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fluctuated in the first 2
years
.
However
,
in
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the following 5
years
(from 2012 to 2017) saw a moderate increase to the
number
2.
Morover
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Moreover
, the
amount
of population who
staying
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on
island
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the island
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remain
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steady in the first
year
, but from 2011 to 2013 was
risen
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to
number
1.5. In the following 2
years
, remained steady
while
in the next
year
expriences
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experienced
a minute drop, and in the
last
year
of the line, saw a
modrate
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moderate
went up to 1.5 as well. Meanwhile, the
amount
of total line
substantial
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surged in the first 4
years
.
Moreover
, in the
last
year
experiences
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experienced
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a
swiftly
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jump to the
number
3.5.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, years, number, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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