You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The table demonstrates the activities performed by adults who
do
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not work in the United Kingdom during the previous year. It illustrates the percentages of both genders; males and females over two time blocks; in the morning and in the afternoon.
Overall
, the majority of women did housework throughout the day, meanwhile, most
men
dedicated their day to job hunting. Notably, both genders spent the least amount of their time drinking. Records show that 21% of females remained
pursuing
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to pursue
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their housework after 12 pm, but 14% of males would watch television during the same
timing
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. Shopping is the second most favourable choice in the morning for girls and boys, at 29% and 25% respectively,
however
,
this
proportion
is
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decreased to 9% of
men
and 17% of women in the afternoon. The number of
men
who played sports stayed fixed over the day at 4%,
in contrast
,
thos
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those
choice
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choices
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changed from 1% to 0% among women. Before 12 pm, staying in bed alongside sitting around had equal scores in both groups at 8% and 3% respectively,
while
these rates drastically declined after 12 pm, when none of the females and only 1% of
men
would stay in bed.
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