IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#show #grade #level’s #activity #revenue #percentage #school’s #event #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The pie graph illustrates the
proportion
Use synonyms
 of
money
Use synonyms
 collected by six grades of King Primary School during their
last
Linking Words
 charity event.
Overall
Linking Words
, the highest amount of donation raised by the 1st
grade
Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
 the lowest
proportion
Use synonyms
 of
money
Use synonyms
 collected was belong to the 3rd
grade
Use synonyms
. The
proportion
Use synonyms
 of
money
Use synonyms
 donated from the 1st
grade
Use synonyms
 was nearly a quarter during the recent fundraising event of King Primary School. The second-highest group was the 2nd
grade
Use synonyms
 with almost 21%
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
followed by the class of 5th
grade
Use synonyms
 with just under a fifth. The remaining grades demonstrated slightly lower donation ratios,
however
Linking Words
, the
proportion
Use synonyms
 of
donation
Fix the agreement mistake
donations
show examples
 from the 3rd
grade
Use synonyms
 was the lowest with 7.8%. The 5th
grade
Use synonyms
 and the 4th
grade
Use synonyms
 contributed just above 18% and just under 14% of the total
money
Use synonyms
 collected during the event respectively.
Submitted by historicalpen on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, money, grade with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: