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the

reasons

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behind

peoples'

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transportation choices to

office

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the office

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, either using a

bicycle

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or a car.

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, there are two main

reasons

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why workers pick a

bicycle

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. They prefer to use

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bicycle

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bicycles

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because it is more healthy and

environmental

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friendly.

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, some

people

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tend to commute with a car since it is their comfort zone.

People

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choosing

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bicycle

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have five

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cycling is an excellent exercise for health and fitness. Not only that, but cycling is

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less

polutant

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pollutant

. Respectively,

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this

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two

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hit

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percentage at 30%.

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, advantages

such

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as no parking problems (15%), no costs (13%), and faster than driving (12%)

also

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are the

reasons

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why

people

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love

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apply

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cycling to their

office

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offices

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. On the other side, there are

people

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who like driving more than cycling.

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, they have five

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too. The crucial reason is

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they feel

cozy

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with that (40%).

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, since the distance from their home to

office

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the office

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is far enough,

people

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prefer to drive (21%).

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that, there are another three

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, and one of

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them

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due to

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their need to bring many things to work like documents or papers. So the pie shows five

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respectively both for cycling and driving to work.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, bicycle, people with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

208 words

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