The two pie charts below show some employment pattens in Great Britain in 199w

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The two pie charts draw the conclusion of six different patterns of manual and non-manual employment

according to

gender in Great Britain in the year 1992. The proportions are given in percentages.

Overall

, most women worked in the non-manual sector, whilst a substantial amount of men contributed to the manual workforce.

Similarly

, both sexes reported general labour as the lowest sector of work. In 1992, over one-third of males held managerial and professional jobs,

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the equivalent figure for females was 29%.

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, British women relayed that clerical or related occupational opportunities were the most

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, boasting a little less than one-third of the whole.

Hence

, it is evident that a significant number of ladies were employed in an office setting.

Additionally

, females represent 9% of other non-manual labour as the least popular avenue,

however

, males displayed clerical or related and other non-manual as the lowest with 6% each. With regards to the physical labour sector, gentlemen accounted for half of the total in both other manual and craft or similar with 26% and 24% respectively.

However

, ladies recorded less than one-third of the whole, with other

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representing a substantial majority of that amount

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27%, and craft or similar a mere 3%. Both sexes viewed general labourers as the smallest area with approximately 1% each.

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