IELTS WRITING Task 1. The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.
The graph gives information about the percentage of visitors who went to Brighton in 30
years
period. Generally, the Pavilion and Pier had its tourists surge, Correct your spelling
30-year
while
in contrast
, the number of people visited
art Wrong verb form
visiting
gallery
and Fix the agreement mistake
galleries
festival
dropped.
In reference to Fix the agreement mistake
festivals
Pavilion
, in 1980 it was visited by almost 20% of Brighton's visitors and reached its peak in 1995 by almost 50%. The number Correct article usage
the Pavilion
then
dipped, but still 10% higher then
in 1980. Pier, Replace the word
than
on the other hand
, also
had a
considerable growth, Remove the article
apply
doubled
from 10% in 1980 to slightly above 20% in 2010. Art Wrong verb form
doubling
gallery
, Fix the agreement mistake
galleries
in contrast
, experienced a substantial drop from just over 20% in the beginning of 1980 to under 10% in 2020, despite a peak of almost 40% in 1985. Festival itself constantly decreased along
the years even though only a marginal drop from Change preposition
over
initially
30% to just under 30% in 2010.Submitted by maukaburtubel on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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