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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of

students

that are joining

North West

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North-West

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University and the percentages of

ethnicity

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the ethnicity

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of art

students

in the university.

Overall

, the most significant proportion

is belonging

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belongs to

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the faculty of

arts

while

the lowest is calculated for medicine. The vast majority of foreign

students

who are joining

arts

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from South America. The majority of

students

who are joining North West University

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attending

Arts

, Computing and Science, with 23%, 22% and 21% of the total

students

respectively. The proportion of Business is almost 15%

while

the ratio of Engineering is nearly a tenth. The remaining two programs, Medicine and Law,

are

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only

accounted

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for minor fractions. There are five different

ethnicity

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ethnicities

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for foreign

Arts

students

and the most dominant one is South Americans with just under 80%. It is followed by Europeans with just over a fifth,

however

, the remaining nationalities, Asians, Africans,

Australians

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and Australians

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are varying

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between 2 and 6

percents

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, arts with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

157 words

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