The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in the furniture industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture depicts the production of
steel
rods in the furniture industry.
Overall
, it is apparently seen that there are 11 stages to producing steel
rods. The process
begins with mixing raw materials and ends with the inspection step.
Looking at the illustration in detail, In the first stage, the raw materials (iron ore, yellow ore, and carbon) are combined before the melting process
at 1300–1500 degrees Celsius. Then
, the materials moved
to the smelting cabin for the refinement Add a missing verb
were moved
process
. After that, metal is poured into ingots, which are connected to a cooling reservoir (60–100 degrees Celsius).
In the following stage, the metal got a roller and became a cylinder. Before the steel
rod is measured for surface check, it is heated by a heating machine. Afterwards, the steel
cylinder is being
cut by the round cutter, and it has an ID stamp. The Unnecessary verb
apply
process
ends when the metal rods are taken to the inspection stage.Submitted by zzahrinaamalia on
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