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The bar chart below shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a second year Graphic Design course at a college in the south of England. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The bar chart below shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a second year Graphic Design course at a college in the south of England. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
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The line chart illustrates the reported amount of abroad
students
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 entering the second-year graphic design course at one of the colleges in the south of England. The bar chart describes the number of enrolled
students
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 from five different countries. There are two different colours of bars indicating the different categories. Blue indicates a student who takes the photography core option major and orange represents
students
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 enrolled in the CAD core option, CAD itself means Computer-Aided-Design. The graphic
also
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 divides the data into two categories based on gender. According
from
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 the graphic, we can conclude that Sweden has the most
students
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 enrolled
to
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 the colleges compared to the rest country mentioned in the data,
meanwhile
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 Syria
is has
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 the least enrolled
student
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students
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 from the shown-information.
Nevertheless
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, Syria has the most female
students
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 enrolled in CAD core options.
On the other hand
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • overseas students
  • enrolled
  • Graphic Design course
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • steady increase/decrease
  • significant
  • minor changes
  • enrollment
  • popular
  • diverse nationalities
  • academic year
  • compared to
  • dominate
  • in contrast
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • visual representation
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