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THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE EXPENDITURE OF TWO CPOUNTRIES ON CONSUMER GOODS IN 2010.

THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE EXPENDITURE OF TWO CPOUNTRIES ON CONSUMER GOODS IN 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the amount spent on five consumer
goods
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 in 2010 in two countries,
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UK
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the UK
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 and
France
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.
Overall
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, the
UK
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 spent more money on
goods
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 as compared to
France
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. On the whole, cars were by far the most popular consumer
goods
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 in 2010
while
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 the least sold
goods
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 were perfume and cameras. In terms of cars, cameras and books, the expenditure was much higher in the
UK
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 than in
France
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. The money spent on cars stood at 400,000
pounds
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 in
France
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whereas
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 the Britons spent 50000
pounds
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 more.
Similarly
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, books in
France
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 were not as popular as in the
UK
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 with a difference of around 100,000
pounds
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.
Likewise
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, cameras in the
UK
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 were not as expensive as in
France
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 with a huge variation of around 200,000
pounds
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.
On the contrary
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,
goods
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 like computers and perfume were used more in
France
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 at just over 380,000
pounds
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 as opposed to the
UK
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 which stood at only 350,000
pounds
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. In a similar fashion, the French used approximately 45% more perfume than the Britons.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, uk, france, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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