Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is reducing the amount of maximum speed of vehicles. Others think that other ways exist. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. เริ่ม 12:40

In
this
contemporary world,
safety
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of
people
while
driving become
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issue of concern. It is evident that controlling the speed of cars, motorbikes, and buses will help.
However
, there are other measures
need
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to
considered
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such
as speed cameras
as well as
education
of
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saftey
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safety
rules. I firmly believe that both
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aspects are vital. To commence with, accurate speed can reduce the risk of accidents.
For example
, studies
shows
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that most of
deaths
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the deaths
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happens
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on roads are the
results
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result
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of overspeeding. It
also
causes effects to other
people
such
as road jams, late reach to destinations, and damages to other vehicles.
Therefore
, if
people
drive with
right
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measures. It will enhance the
safety
of everyone.
On the other hand
, speed cameras play an important role.
According to
a report, Dubai is a place where
people
are
affraid
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afraid
to increase the speed
due to
the
fine
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associated.
Thus
, they have fewer damages as
comapared
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compared
to other countries in the world.
Additionally
, rules and
regulation
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regulations
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are
also
neccessary
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necessary
.
While
issuing
licence
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there must be
brief
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disscussion
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discussion
on the zones with minimum and maximum speed.
Such
as issuing them a booklet to read and take a test before
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step. Which will
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in learning about
roads
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safety
rules
on
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to
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high
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extend
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. In summary, no doubt vehicles ease
citizens
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citizens'
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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however
there is a topic of concern which is security on roads.
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the speed
according to
kilometer
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kilometre
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will
also
help but I think we can not deny the other
phenomenons
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.
Therefore
,
government
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the government
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should
also
impose strict actions on the victims in order to maintain
the
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safety
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • maximum speed
  • speed limits
  • reaction time
  • stopping distance
  • fatality
  • driving habits
  • traffic education
  • road infrastructure
  • vehicle safety
  • enforcement
  • traffic laws
  • technology integration
  • traffic management
  • high-risk areas
  • strategic planning
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