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Some companies require their employees to wear a uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays it is
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a requirement
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 from employers of different companies for the employees to have a dress code or standardized clothing.
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 demand has both benefits,
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includes
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professional
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a professional
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 with equality and safety, and drawbacks,
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expresses
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 the lack of
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 and,
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, comfort and fit
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. Some organizations are advantageous
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 having a certain
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, including equality and security. Specifically, when the organization has a demand
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, it is clear for the employees to be presentable and for the company to have a band representation.
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, the company of Nike has
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 brand and almost all specialists of
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 company, beginning from manufacturers and ending with shop assistants,
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all follow the rule and principle of neat appearance.
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, it can strengthen team spirit which eliminates any kind of discrimination. Having these factors of dress code, employees feel themselves more protective and it is easy to distinguish them from the visitors or customers.
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, there are
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 some downsides
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includes
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 the lack of
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 and
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, that are connected with comfort. If it comes for the first negative side, it
contents
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 some kinds of uniformity and monotony, where at the same time the individuals cannot express
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their own
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 interests,
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concludes
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 lack of
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.
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, some
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 that have potential discomfort and limited choices can be the consequences of implementing the idea of uniformity of clothes. Put simply, sometimes wearing the same clothes in one place can be restrictive and limit the choice, bringing some unsatisfied emotional well-being. Relying on these matters, the people, who have the same clothes as a uniform, may have some
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 connected with
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individuality
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 and comfort In conclusion, there are some positive things in wearing a uniform with having
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 professional
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 and brand, but at the same
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 improvement has some negative sides,
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as mentioned
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 above.

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Task Achievement
Ensure that your introduction fully paraphrases the question and presents a clear opinon or approach to answering the question posed. While your introduction is present, it needs to directly address the advantages and disadvantages in a balanced manner.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to ensure that your essay flows more naturally from one point to another. This will also help to make the structure of your arguments clearer, thereby boosting your score for coherence.
Task Achievement
In presenting arguments, try to provide clear, real-world examples to support each point you make. While you have attempted to do so, the examples require more detailed development and relevance to the specific context of workplace uniform policies.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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