The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how many
books
were read by males and females at Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014. In general, there are two lines, mentioning two types of gender, where the first one represents the highest quantity of
books
, and the second one has some fluctuations expressing both upward and downward trends. Turning to the specifics, in the
beginning
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both lines had different numbers of
books
that were read by men and women. The female
category
started from just above 4000
books
in 2011,
while
the opposite
category
began from approximately 2000
books
. Starting from the initial quantity the first
category
went on
increasing up
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to almost 10000
books
from 2011 to 2013,
following
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followed
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with
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by
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decrease
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a decrease
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to 7000 items in 2014. In the
meantime
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meantime,
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the male
category
reflected the steady growth from 2000 to 3000
books
between 2011 and 2012, but after 2012 it had a sharp increase to about 10000
books
, continuing to grow up to 13000 items in 2014.
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