The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary Schools since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary Schools since its construction in 1950. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate the comparison of West
Park
Secondary
School
in three years, which are 1950, 1980, and 2010. Generally speaking,
it is clear that
houses
and farmland
are
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will be
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removed in the next years,
while
main
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the main
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road stays the same. In 1950, West
Park
Secondary
School
was divided into four sections.
First,
there were
houses
built on the
north-west
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northwest
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side
of the map,
then
the
school
building was constructed next to the
houses
, both
was
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apply
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on the
side
of the main road. On the bottom of the map, there
were
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was
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farmland on the left
side
and
playground
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a playground
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on the right
side
. Thirty years later, in 1980,
houses
are
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were
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replaced by
car
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the car
a car
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park
and science
blok
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club
which is the part of the
school
building that
constructed
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was constructed
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between
car
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the car
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park
and the main building of the
school
.
Moreover
, farmland is demolished to construct a sports field. Meanwhile,
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the playground
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playground
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playgrounds
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still
existed
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exist
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in
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apply
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this
year.
Furthermore
, in 2010,
car
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the car
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park
was enlarged until almost dominated
the
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apply
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half of the map.
On the other hand
,
playground
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the playground
a playground
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was diminished because of the replacement of
sports
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the sports
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field
Fix the agreement mistake
fields
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which was diminished too.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school, houses, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • initially
  • subsequently
  • transformation
  • expansion
  • reduction
  • relocation
  • layout
  • adjacent
  • modification
  • demolished
  • constructed
  • facilities
  • infrastructure
  • proximity
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