The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media in one country in 2013, 2015 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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of individuals
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the news on 4 different
media
in a particular area. In brief, television was one of the most popular
media
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over
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the
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time. But
in contrast
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3
media
was variable. In more detail, it can be seen that the heist usage in all
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was television even in 2017 with almost 70% in all 3 years. unlike
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similarity, a significant increase in
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of people who
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to use
internet
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should be mentioned as well.
this
media
only had 30%
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user
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users
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in 2013 and approached 40%
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of customer
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customer
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customers
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in
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2 years,
however
, the number had
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rise between 2015 to 2017 with more than 65%
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user
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users
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.
Furthermore
, another markable change in
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percent
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of
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users
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belongs to
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newspaper
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newspapers
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with a smooth fall from more than 40% to almost 21%
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buyer
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buyers
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.
However
, the figure for radio was around 30%
in
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each year without any impressive change.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words media with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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