Some people think that dangerous sport should be banned while others believe that people should be free to choose.Discuss both views and give your opinion
In general,
sports
are introduced to keep everyone healthy and it also
involves some cultural traditions. There are certain dangerous sports
and some think this
should be banned and others believe it is people
's choice. In my opinion, I would say we should not ban
any sports
as every sport
has its own good and bad.
On the one hand, sport
is introduced to entertain people
which gives happiness not only those
who participate Change preposition
to those
which
Correct word choice
but
also
makes the audience entertained
. There could be some difficulties in every Verb problem
apply
sports
Change to a singular noun
sport
lets
say football involves leg Correct your spelling
let's
injuries
, cricket has chances of back pain and some sports
even lead to death. There are some unfortunate situations since any kind of activities
can lead to problems from minor to major issues. Fix the agreement mistake
activity
For instance
, a person while
walking also
can slip if he fall
down on a rock can cause severe Change the verb form
falls
injuries
. Considering this
we cannot ban
walking and similarly
, we cannot take only this
negative situations
and Fix the agreement mistake
situation
ban
some sports
.
On the other side, there are certain sports
which is
very harmful to Change the verb form
are
people
can
affect their Correct word choice
and can
life
. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For example
, Jallikattu is one of the famous south indian
Change the capitalization
Indian
sports
and many people
protested against it due to
nature
of the Correct article usage
the nature
sports
Fix the agreement mistake
sport
is
very harmful since controlling bull at certain times injures Wrong verb form
being
people
which could even lead them to death. Although
there are certain
other reasons for Change the adjective
certainly
this
protest many were against this
protest from
worldwide and Change preposition
apply
finally
Supreme Court of India provided Correct article usage
a judement
judement
to continue Correct your spelling
judgement
judgment
this
sport
. This
has happened people
still believed
there are Wrong verb form
believe
lot
of good things involved Change the article
a lot
on
Change preposition
in
this
sport
like they have some cultural things and maintaining the bulls
wealth Change noun form
bull's
bulls'
due to
this
.
In conclusion, we should not ban
any sports
just because of the injuries
instead
we can restrict the game to have more strict guideliness
. Correct your spelling
guidelines
This
way we can make everyone to be
satisfied and provide more Verb problem
apply
saftey
in the Correct your spelling
safety
sports
will help to prevent injuries
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