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Because of traffic and housing problems in the cities, the government encourages business to move to the rural area. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#traffic #cities #government #business #move #area
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 increasing day by day. Some say
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 that shifting
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, the prime advantage of transferring business to
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 is the development of the infrastructure
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 the local community.With the introduction of business in
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, the locals have
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 to be a part of that business because they need more employees who are from that place, so they do not need to worry about
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic diversification
  • infrastructure strain
  • rural character
  • urban decongestion
  • environmental impact
  • economic stimulation
  • logistical challenges
  • commuting
  • work-life balance
  • cultural clashes
  • habitat destruction
  • rural depopulation
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