The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map below gives information about the formation of the factory site now and the
planning
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development of it in the future.
Overall
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, the picture shows that the plan will be accommodated housing
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area
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areas
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for the employee of the industry.
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, the details of the map
illustrates
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that now the industrial place is built
in
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on
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the side of roads which has a circular road
connected
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connecting
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the outside and inside of the
area
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.
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, in the north of the building estate is the farmland that
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is seperated
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seperated
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separated
from the location by the river.
Secondly
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, the planned
realocation
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relocation
reallocation
for
this
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site visualizes that the factory buildings will be replaced with the employe's houses. Not only that, the public
area
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will be built
such
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as a school, playground, shops, and a medical centre.
Moreover
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, the location will have new roads that access
housing
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the housing
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side near the town and
accross
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across
the river.
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, the
area
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will be bigger than now but the farmland will be smaller.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • factory complex
  • housing area
  • infrastructure
  • transportation links
  • amenities
  • environmental sustainability
  • residential buildings
  • communal facilities
  • work-life balance
  • industrial development
  • urban planning
  • green spaces
  • employee accommodation
  • accessibility
  • layout
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