The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary Schools since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps below illustrate the visual buildings of the West Park Secondary
School
in three development years, 1950, 1980, and 2010. Overall
, there were some relocations and new constructions in that
years.
The detailed looks of the maps show that in 1950, the Correct determiner usage
those
school
just had a main building and playground. The location was also
near from
Change preposition
to
community's
houses and farmland on the left side. Correct article usage
the community's
In the
3 decades later, the area was bigger than before. Some new places which supported the student's activities were built Change preposition
The
such
as a science block and a sports field. Additionally
, there was a car park area. As a result
, the farmland and housing estate was demolished.
Finally
in 2010, there was a small development to the Add a comma
Finally,
school
site. The car park side was bigger than before. In contrast
, the sports arena and the playground were smaller. Despite that, the rooms that always
in the same way as the first development Add a missing verb
were always
was
the main building of the Correct subject-verb agreement
were
school
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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