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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps below illustrate the way to the city hospital by the town
road
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 in 2007 and in
the
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three years later.
Overall
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, in 2010, more public facilities
developed
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were developed
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 to connect the hospital,
such
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 as
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bus
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a bus
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 station, public car park, and
two
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 roundabouts. The detailed looks of the diagrams reflect that the city hospital was surrounded by the ring
road
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. In 2007, there was only a car park for staff and public. But, in 2010, it was enlarged. So
that
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, the place has
two
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 parking
area
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areas
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;
in
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on
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 the east side of the building was for the public and the previous one was only for the employees.
Two
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 roundabouts were built to connect the
road
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 with the
bus
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 station
where
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which
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it
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was just
bus
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 stops before. The
bus
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 station was constructed
in
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on
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 the right side of the hospital
road
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 which had
two
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 gates; one to the hospital, and the other one to the main street.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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