some people say history is one of the most important School subjects.other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In my
opinion
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I think every
subjects
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subject
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is important for us. We have to learn everything through our past, present and
future
. some
people
say that
History
is one of the most important School subjects it's true but it has to go
along with
today's world which is
science
and
technology
. How can we move without our
history
, the
people
behind us ''The ancient
people
''
is
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are
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the most powerful
people
who
pushes
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us to move forward.
The
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They
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taught us how to fire a light, how to find
a food
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food
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, how to
lives
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with other
and
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animals, how to survive and others. Of
course
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course,
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we wouldn’t know that without them.
Science
and
technology
are important too. They give us a chance to move forward with them. without
science
and
technology
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technology,
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we are just normal human
being
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beings
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. we spend our daily life with no useful. Without them we have no light we have no food, we have no comfortable stuff and things. old
people
can
survived
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without these things. Human creates lots of
invention
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inventions
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to give
an unlimited wants
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unlimited wants
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of
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people
based on a limited government. May I
gives
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give
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one example of the development of
Science
and
Technology
. With
this
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these
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two things it
give
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gives
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us a chance to be a member of
ASEAN
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the ASEAN
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'' Association of South East Asia
Nation
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'' we can be able to communicate with other 9 countries with
the
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high
technology
. It
help
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helps
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us to be a TEAMWORK with the 9 other countries to develop our country
help
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and help
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us in terms of transportation, communication, collaboration etc. It can definitely hold on to that hope
that
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in the near 
future
.
Overall
economics can totally
achieves
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achieve
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. it is a fact that the member of the member of the ASEAN have differences in
term
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terms
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of political standing, culture and traditions but it's not a problem with our help I know that there's a bright
future
are
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waiting for all of us.and
that is
a reason why
history
,
science
and
Technology
 is important. We use
History
to learn about others, their culture,
their
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tradition to
be understand
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understand
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each other more and more and
using
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use
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Science
and
technology
to help us, our country,
our
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and our
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world to be moving forward, to help each other and to give a bright
chances
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chance
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and
future
for everyone, especially kids give a
chances
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chance
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to them to study, to go to school, to get knowledge so the next ten years, twenty years to the new up Coming year all of them can help each other to pass these chances to other kids go on and on.
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Fully explore both views presented in the task prompt before presenting your own opinion. Include relevant examples to support each view and your own opinion.
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  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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