The bar chart shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a third year Computer Science course at a Canadian college. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a third year Computer Science course at a Canadian college.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A glance at the bar chart provided reveals some information about
gender
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the gender
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distribution of attendees from five different countries, namely Singapore, Malaysia, China,
Sri
Lanka
, and France in a computer science course with two options
include
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including
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networking
core
and database
core
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
China has the most enrollments in both genders, in inverse proportion, France has the least of those.
While
Chinese women mostly prefer
networking
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the networking
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core
option, all three French women enrolled in
database
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the database
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core
option.
Total
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A total
The total
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number
of male
students
from China who registered for
networking
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the networking
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and database
core
option is eight with
the
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a
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proportion of one to seven, respectively. Just two men from France chose to study abroad and
number
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a number
the number
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of them in these two fields
are
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is
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the same.
Sri
Lanka
and Singapore have striking similarities in
number
of attendees.
Total
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A total
The total
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number
of
students
from
Sri
Lanka
is 12, very much the same as that of
for
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apply
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Singapore. The
number
of male
students
in
Sri
Lanka
are
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is
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twice as many as female
students
. The
number
female
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of female
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students
from Malaysia is greater than that of
for
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apply
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male
students
with
the
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a
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proportion of seven to four.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sri, lanka, core, number, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrollment
  • overseas students
  • third year
  • Computer Science course
  • Canadian college
  • trends
  • plateau
  • significant changes
  • economic factors
  • educational reputation
  • dynamics
  • implications
  • resource planning
  • classroom diversity
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