The maps depict current structures of Islip town center and future look after planned developments are applied.

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These

two

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plans describe the re-building of the area of the Islip

town

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centre in the future years. In the first plan, we can see the current

town

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centre which is relatively modest. There are

two

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housing locations, between a park and a school. We can

also

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observe

two

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lines of shops on the opposite side of

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the housings

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housings

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housing

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. These

two

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lines of shops are separated by the main road.

However

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, the plans for the reconstruction of

this

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place are quite generous. We can expect the new shopping centre with a car park and a bus station in the north of

this

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part of the

town

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. There are

way

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ways

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for pedestrians only , and more new houses for living. The most significant change of

this

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place is the dual carriageway which surrounds

all

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apply

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this

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place.

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, the re-building plans are

innovating

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innovative

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, and make

this

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part of the

town

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better accessible and more convenient for their inhabitants.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

157 words

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