The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides
last
year's data of
Change preposition
on
employees
per job type and gender in Australia. Generally, there were seven types of jobs
and two gender
, male and female.
Change to a plural noun
genders
Firstly
, tradespeople was the most popular occupation for male
in Australia Fix the agreement mistake
males
last
year with 900,000 males
working in that particular area. Whereas
the clerical jobs
followed with a close number
around 875,000. However
, more than 500,000 males
chose to work in professional settings with 650,000 males
while
600,000 worked as managers and around 500,000 as semi-professionals. Around 550,000 males
decided to work in production and other 400,000 as laborers.
Secondly
, the
clerical Correct article usage
apply
jobs
was the most picked job for women
with almost 1 million women
. Women
in Correct article usage
the professionals
professionals
area showed Change the noun form
professional
significant
Correct article usage
a significant
number
with 700,000 women
, bigger
Correct article usage
a bigger
number
than the men, but only 200,000 worked as managers. Around 350 thousands
picked the production and around 270 Change to singular
thousand
thousands
as Change to singular
thousand
laborers
. The production and trades sectors showed the same Change the spelling
labourers
number
pf
female Correct your spelling
of
employees
with 100,000 employees
. Overall
, most of
male and female Change preposition
apply
employees
chose to work for jobs
like clerks and tradespeople.Submitted by nadhif2799 on
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