The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides
last
year's data
of
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on
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employees
per job type and gender in Australia. Generally, there were seven types of
jobs
and two
gender
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genders
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, male and female.
Firstly
, tradespeople was the most popular occupation for
male
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males
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in Australia
last
year with 900,000
males
working in that particular area.
Whereas
the clerical
jobs
followed with a close
number
around 875,000.
However
, more than 500,000
males
chose to work in professional settings with 650,000
males
while
600,000 worked as managers and around 500,000 as semi-professionals. Around 550,000
males
decided to work in production and other 400,000 as laborers.
Secondly
,
the
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apply
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clerical
jobs
was the most picked job for
women
with almost 1 million
women
.
Women
in
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the professionals
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professionals
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professional
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area showed
significant
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a significant
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number
with 700,000
women
,
bigger
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a bigger
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number
than the men, but only 200,000 worked as managers. Around 350
thousands
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thousand
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picked the production and around 270
thousands
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thousand
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as
laborers
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labourers
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. The production and trades sectors showed the same
number
pf
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of
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female
employees
with 100,000
employees
.
Overall
, most
of
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apply
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male and female
employees
chose to work for
jobs
like clerks and tradespeople.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, jobs, males, number, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment figures
  • Sectors
  • Significant disparities
  • Gender balance
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Dominant
  • Inferred
  • Labor market
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Insights
  • Implications
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