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Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The reductions in public
transport
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 fees and government investment in
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transport
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 sector will be helpful in order to reduce emissions significantly.
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of
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motor vehicles are responsible for the increase
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 pollution, public
transport
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 would change the paradigms of the
people
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 to shift
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 reliable
transport
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 facilities and reduce
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road
traffic
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. I agree with the statement and
this
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 essay
explain
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 my possession.
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, picking motor vehicles with fossil fuels as the source of energy would increase the number of pollution.
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 fossil fuels will produce carbon emissions through a combustion process in conventional vehicles.
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, creating new public
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 options like trains will eventually attract
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people
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into
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environmentally
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an environmentally
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 friendly
transport
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system
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.
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,
modern
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the modern
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 train
system
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 is considered the most reliable public
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 with its punctuality
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 driving cars would make the
people
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 trapped in
traffic
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.
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, an incentive in
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a mass-transport
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mass-
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mass transport
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transport
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system
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 would eventually reduce
the
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road
traffic
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, as many
people
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 leave their cars at home. Even though some
people
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 might still drive their cars into the workplace,
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still it will reduce the the
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due to
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 the cheaper cost of
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.
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, driving a motor vehicle will cost them
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fuel expenses and tollway tickets. These items would cost them tons of money especially when the gasoline price rises. In conclusion, investing in public
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 and giving reduction for the
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 ticket
are
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 not only helping the government to handle the environmental issues but
also
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 the
traffic
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 problems. Cheaper
transport
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 tickets and reliable
transport
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 systems would attract
the
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people
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 to shift
into
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 mass
transport
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system
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systems
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 and
deplete
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 the emissions.
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, the government should
also
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 consider the budget in order to finance the new
transport
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 projects.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • carbon footprint
  • mass transit
  • subsidization
  • fare reduction
  • environmental impact
  • urban planning
  • public policy
  • commuter behavior
  • infrastructural development
  • economic efficiency
  • equitable access
  • lifestyle shift
  • congestion
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