The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a European country between 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a European country between 1979 and 2004
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The chart illustrates the
consumption
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of different kinds of meats
such
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as chicken, beef, lamb, and
fish
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in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, beef was the highest
number
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in the beginning,
while
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the smallest
number
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could be looked at
fish
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. Other meats showed different kinds of movement. Beef has 220
grains
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per person per week which is the biggest, which
then
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, dropped
for
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to
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less than 200
grains
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. After that, it kept decreasing until it touched
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number
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a number
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around 100. The
consumption
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of chicken showed
sharply
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sharp
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changes from 148
grains
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per person per week to a
number
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around
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of around
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250
grains
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.
Moreover
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, in 1979,
a
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the
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consumption
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of chicken was similar to lamb which was more than 140
grains
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.
However
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, lamb
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consumption's
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consumption
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was rapidly decreasing to nearly in the same numbers of
fish
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(about 50
grains
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).
In addition
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,
a
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the
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number
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of
fish
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was slowly decreasing
for
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to
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less than 50
grains
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.
Furthermore
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,
in
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apply
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each year, it showed a little bit of
increasing
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increase
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, number, grains with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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