The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a European country between 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a European country between 1979 and 2004
The chart illustrates the
consumption
of different kinds of meats
such
as chicken, beef, lamb, and
fish
in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
, beef was the highest
number
in the beginning,
while
the smallest
number
could be looked at
fish
. Other meats showed different kinds of movement. Beef has 220
grains
per person per week which is the biggest, which
then
, dropped
for
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to
show examples
less than 200
grains
. After that, it kept decreasing until it touched
number
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a number
show examples
around 100. The
consumption
of chicken showed
sharply
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sharp
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changes from 148
grains
per person per week to a
number
around
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of around
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250
grains
.
Moreover
, in 1979,
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
consumption
of chicken was similar to lamb which was more than 140
grains
.
However
, lamb
consumption's
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consumption
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was rapidly decreasing to nearly in the same numbers of
fish
(about 50
grains
).
In addition
,
a
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the
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number
of
fish
was slowly decreasing
for
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to
show examples
less than 50
grains
.
Furthermore
,
in
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apply
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each year, it showed a little bit of
increasing
Replace the word
increase
show examples
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, number, grains with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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