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The bar chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billion) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.

The bar chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billion) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.
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The bar chart provides information regarding the total
number
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 of minutes in
billion
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 in three different types of calls over a
period
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 from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 local fixed lines reached their peak by the middle of the
period
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 and
then
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 showed a gradual decline. The national and international calls witnessed an upward trend and mobile calls had a significant growth during the
period
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.
To begin
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 with, the figure for national and international calls had a gradual increase starting from just under 40
billion
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 to slightly over 60
billion
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. In terms of the mobile call category, its rate started from around 2
billion
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 in 1995 and showed a significant rise to around 22
billion
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 in 2000.
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, the
number
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 jumped considerably to around 45
billion
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 in 2022. Turning no local calls, starting from just over 70
billion
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 in 1995, the
number
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 reached a peak of 90
billion
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 in 1999. In the following three years, the
number
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 witnessed a gradual decline to around 70
billion
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 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, billion, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • fixed line
  • mobile
  • local calls
  • national calls
  • international calls
  • trend
  • billion
  • minutes
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • plummet
  • outpace
  • transition
  • technology advancement
  • consumer behavior
  • market saturation
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