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The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows Scotland’s exports to the rest of the UK and the rest of the world for the year 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
bargraph
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bar graph
 reflects
Scotland
's exports to the
rest
 of the
UK
 and the
rest
 of the
world
 for the year 2014. It represents the quantity of
export
 of Scotlands to
rest
 of the
world
 is greater than
export
 to
rest
 of the
UK
. The
tolat
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total
 value of
scotland
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Scotland
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export
 to
rest
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the rest
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 of the
world
 is 13.8
billion
 in business, finances, hotels and
resturant
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restaurant
services
whereas
 it
export
 on,ly around 1.7
billion
 to
rest
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the rest
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 of the
UK
.
Likewise
, the data clearly illustrates that the
export
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exports
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 to the
rest
 of the
world
is
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were
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 almost half times
higher
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high
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than
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as
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 the
export
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exports
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 to
rest
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the rest
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 of the
world
 in 2014.
Similarly
, chemicals and mineral products, wholesale and retail
services
 are
other
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the other
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 two highest
services
 exported by
Scotland
 to
rest
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the rest
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 of the around which
is
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are
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 9.5 and 8.2
billions
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billion
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 respectively.
On the other hand
, Metal, mechanical and transport
services
 and electrical and instrumental
services
 were the least
export
services
 by
Scotland
 to
rest
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the rest
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 of the
world
.
However
, the maximum amount of the
services
 exported by
scotland
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Scotland
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 to
UK
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the UK
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 is on chemical and mineral
product
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products
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 worth 5
billion
 and the minimum amount
on
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is on
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agricture
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agriculture
,
foresty
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forestry
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, fishing and mining
services
that
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which
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 cost only 0.6
billion
 in 2014. In
comparision
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comparison
, the
export
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exports
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 to the
rest
 of the
world
 showed the highest percentage of receiving the
services
 from
scotland
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Scotland
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 than
rest
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the rest
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 of the
UK
.
Overall
, the
bargraph
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graph
 highlights the significant contribution of the
rest
 of the
world
 to
Scotland
's
export
 market
as well as
 the smaller but
the
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apply
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growing
export
 market to
rest
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the rest
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 of the
world
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words scotland, rest, uk, world, export, billion, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • exports
  • Scotland
  • rest of the UK
  • rest of the world
  • comparisons
  • total value
  • higher
  • percentage
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating trend
  • significant contribution
  • export market
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