The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates aged 20-24, in one European country over a two-year period.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates aged 20-24, in one European country over a two-year period.
The bar chart provides the ratio of unemployed graduates between the ages of 20 to 24 in a European country from 2008 to 2009.
Overall
, there were more male unemployed graduates rather than female. In
October
2008, there was a surge in unemployment for both genders, making the number rise sharply.
Although
later the chart showed a notable decline, it escalated again in
October
2009, breaking the record as the highest figure. Men saw a decrease in the amount of unemployment from 10% in January 2008 to approximately 7% in April 2008,
however
, the number grew dramatically in
October
2008 making it just above 16%. It diminished to more or less 13% in Jan 2009 and
then
continued to remain relatively stable before it increased again in
October
2009 with roughly 23%. The percentage of women
also
fluctuated in
October
2008 to around 13% from about 6% three months before.
Nevertheless
, it gradually fell back to 6% in April 2009. But from July to
October
2009, many female graduates continue to grow unemployed again, making it less than 15%.
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