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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. summarize and report information about main features

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. summarize and report information about main features
The maps show how a science
park
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 has developed over the
last
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 fifteen years.
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, there have been several changes, the most noticeable being the increases in
science
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the science
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 building, and
elimination
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the elimination
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 of the
park
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 .
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, being more accessible by stations and cycle
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path
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paths
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. In 2008, the railway crossed the south side of the science
park
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 and next to it, there was woodland which stretched from the south to north
in
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on
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 the west side. IT
center
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centre
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was surrounded by
railway
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a railway
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, woodland, and
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car
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a car
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park
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. business units were located on the opposite side of
IT
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the IT
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center
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centre
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, and it got in touch with
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car
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the car
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park
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 and cyber security by
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path
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the path
a path
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. Woodland,
grass land
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grassland
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, and offices were along horizontal
line
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lines
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 in the south. It was noted that the reception building was exactly in front of the offices. Turning to the present-day map, it can be seen that the grassland has gone , and
being
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is being
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 replaced by research and development
building
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buildings
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. The offices remain the same, as do the trees. Reception has been converted to the university hub.
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,
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path
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a path
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 have been constructed between the university and the
car
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park
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 and
also
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 the cycle
path
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 has been built along the road. In terms of accessibility to
transportation
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the transportation
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 system, the bus stop and train station are built. It is evident that changes in size have been performed, too. the
car
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park
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 and cyber security have been contracted and expanded, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, path, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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