The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 200 to 2006
The given
bart
chart represents the worldwide sales of 4 digital Correct your spelling
bar
games
( mobile phone games
, online games
, console games
handheld games
) between 2010 and 2006. Units measured in billion
.
Fix the agreement mistake
billions
Overall
, handheld games
experienced an upward trend, while
console games
experienced an
downward trend throughout the period.
In 2000 the sales of handheld Change the article
a
games
was
about 11 Change the verb form
were
billion
and reached the highest point at
the in Change preposition
apply
of
period just under 18 Change preposition
apply
billion
, in 2006. This
unit's sale
always Fix the agreement mistake
sales
in
increased rate till 2006. Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
console games
earned nearly 6 billion
in the tear
2000 but the rate gradually decreased and made the lowest point in 2006.
Online Correct your spelling
year
games
and mobile games
obtained same
in 2002, which was about 1 Correct article usage
the same
billion
and in 2004 about 4 billion
. But in the end
Online Add a comma
end,
game
outraced Fix the agreement mistake
games
the
mobile Correct article usage
apply
games
in 2006.Submitted by sahareatushar124 on
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