The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 200 to 2006

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 200 to 2006
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The given
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bar
chart represents the worldwide sales of 4 digital
games
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( mobile phone
games
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, online
games
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, console
games
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handheld
games
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) between 2010 and 2006. Units measured in
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billion
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billions
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.
Overall
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, handheld
games
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experienced an upward trend,
while
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console
games
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experienced
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downward trend throughout the period. In 2000 the sales of handheld
games
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was
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about 11
billion
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and reached the highest point
at
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the in
of
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period just under 18
billion
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, in 2006.
This
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unit's
sale
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always
in
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increased rate till 2006.
On the other hand
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console
games
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earned nearly 6
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in the
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year
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2000 but the rate gradually decreased and made the lowest point in 2006. Online
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and mobile
games
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obtained
same
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the same
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in 2002, which was about 1
billion
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and in 2004 about 4
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. But in the
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Online
game
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games
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outraced
the
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mobile
games
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in 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words games, billion with synonyms.
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