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The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 200 to 2006

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 200 to 2006
#sales #kinds #games
The given
bart
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bar
 chart represents the worldwide sales of 4 digital
games
 ( mobile phone
games
, online
games
, console
games
 handheld
games
) between 2010 and 2006. Units measured in
billion
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billions
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.
Overall
, handheld
games
 experienced an upward trend,
while
 console
games
 experienced
an
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a
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 downward trend throughout the period. In 2000 the sales of handheld
games
was
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were
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 about 11
billion
 and reached the highest point
at
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apply
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the in
of
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period just under 18
billion
, in 2006.
This
 unit's
sale
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sales
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 always
in
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apply
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increased rate till 2006.
On the other hand
 console
games
 earned nearly 6
billion
 in the
tear
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year
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 2000 but the rate gradually decreased and made the lowest point in 2006. Online
games
 and mobile
games
 obtained
same
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the same
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 in 2002, which was about 1
billion
 and in 2004 about 4
billion
. But in the
end
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end,
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 Online
game
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games
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 outraced
the
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apply
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mobile
games
 in 2006.
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