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Task 1: The number of vehicles registered for use between 1996 and 2006 in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the usage of vehicles in
an
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 European country, commencing from 1996 to 2006. In general, there was an upward trend in the private
cars
 and other
types
registration
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of registration
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 rates,
while
 the
usages
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 of lorries and motorcycles
were
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 experiencing a slight
decreased
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. In both years, private
cars
 remain highest among other
types
 of vehicles. In 1996, private
cars
is
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 the only figure that reached 19 million,
while
 the other
types
 of vehicles remained under 1.2 billion, including lorries,
bus
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buses
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, motorcycles, and other
types
.
Subsequently
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 in 2006, there was a rise
of
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numbers
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in
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 private
cars
 and other
types
,
reached
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 nearly a quarter and 1.9 million respectively. A
down ward
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 was experienced by Lorries with the receding of 0,1%, followed by motorcycles reached around 0.6.
Bus
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 was the only data which stay unchanged with 0.1 million in both years.
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Care should be taken to accurately present data; misrepresentation can lead to a lower score. Additionally, avoid excessive use of generalizations without supporting details. The use of proper cohesive devices and clear paragraphing will help improve coherence and cohesion.
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Ensure full understanding of the task and complete it as required. This includes an accurate summary of the main features and making relevant comparisons. Detailed and accurate representations of the data are crucial, and the essay should reflect a comprehensive understanding of the task to achieve a high score.

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