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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. You would like to rent a car for a holiday. Write to the car rental agency. In your letter •Explain what type of car you would like •Give details of when you would like the car •Request more information about the cost

#minutes #rent #car #holiday #agency #•explain #type #•give #•request #information #cost
Dear Sir, I am writing to request information about the rent a
car
 for a holiday. I would like to
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want a
car
 that can accommodate all family members. I think it will be a seven-seater and black in colour. I need a
car
 that can handle long distances and be able to overcome bad roads as best as possible. I will pick up the
car
 later
this
 weekend because I have a trip planned for the weekend, it might be quite rushed, but I hope I will get the
car
 I mentioned above. Please deliver the
car
 to my house in the morning around 5am
this
 Sunday.
Finally
, I would like to know more about the costs of the
car
 I rent. Please send cost information to the phone number I sent after viewing
this
 letter. Thank you in advance for your assistance with
this
 matter. Yours faithfully, Le Huy Gia Hoang
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure the logical flow of ideas by better organizing the information in a more structured format with clear introductory sentences for each paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion
Maintain a single focus for each paragraph, avoiding mixing requests and details to enhance readability.
Task Achievement
Elaborate more on the specific details of your request, such as the specific car model you require and any particular features, to fully address the task.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is generally suitable but aim for consistent formality throughout the letter to maintain an appropriate register.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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