The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph describes the number of retail outlets closed and opened in an unnamed region in the years 2011 and 2018.
Overall
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, there was a significant fall in both closures and openings of the
stores
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from 2011 to 2018. In 2011, many
shops
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were opened which was approximately around 8000 and experienced a dramatic decline in 2012, with roughly around 25% of
stores
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being constructed. It
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gradually showed an upward trend with just above 6000
stores
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developed before it went down again in 2015 to 4000
shops
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and remained stable until 2016.
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, it increased very slightly just over 4000 until it dropped to 3000 in 2018, which was the least
stores
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opened in the past eight years.
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, the closure started with a decline from 2011 to 2012 with just below 6000
stores
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.
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, it gradually increased to just over 7000 in 2013 before it went down to around 6500
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closed in 2014 and significantly dropped below 1000 in 2015.
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in 2016 the number of
shops
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closed showed a sudden increase to just over 5000, it went down again slightly in 2012 with 5000
stores
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and rose to just over 5000 by 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stores, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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