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Some people claim that not enough of waste from homesbis recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste.

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Some
people
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 opine that waste from houses is usually not recycled. So they propose that the
government
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 can bring about a change in
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society by imposing strict
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 on recycling, which can be an effective way to increase the recycling rate among the public. I strongly agree with
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 statement to an extent. I think the
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 should initiate environmental protection
laws
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 so that
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 are educated about it and implement it in their lives. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will be explaining my views on the same. Over the years, we have been taught that
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wastes
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/disposals can be pulled off in an efficient manner by simply focusing on the 3 R’s, which stand for Reduce, Reuse, and Recycle.
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 the 3 R’s are very effective, they’re pretty hard to implement.
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, the
government
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 should implement
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 and regulations that solely focus on helping
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 to reduce
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wastes
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/
disposals
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 and reuse products.
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, the
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 should start campaigns on the importance of recycling
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 and teach everyone to practise the recycling process and reuse those products.
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, the schools can
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 educate the students about the environmental impact and significance of the recycling and reusing process so that they can divide and pack the recyclable and non-recyclable
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 and later dump them into the recycling bins.
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, the
government
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 should initiate legal regulations and
laws
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 related to recycling management, so that the public may adopt and follow these environmental practices as there are some
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 who abide only by the
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 rules.
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, the
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recycling facilities in each city by distributing compost bins.
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 way, the environment will be much cleaner and greener. The environment will be significantly affected and polluted if
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 do not follow the recycling process or throw away the disposals properly. Some
people
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 think it is individual responsibility and
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 does not need to be made a law. But if not for
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, no one cares to be responsible.
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, I strongly believe that
people
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 should be encouraged to recycle
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waste products and if the governments and citizens keep up their efforts,
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 we can definitely preserve and protect our environmental resources for future generations to come.
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