The bar chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billion) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.

The bar chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billion) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002.
The bar chart gives us information about the
amount
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of times a local call, national and international calls, and mobile calls could be made in the UK, from 1995 up to 8 years in a row.
Overall
, throughout the period of time, the majority of the UK residents use a domestic call, followed by national and international calls and
then
mobile calls. A fluctuation was experienced by domestic calls before it remained constant in 2002. Since 1995, a domestic call had a steady growth of around 5
billion
each year and reached their peak 5 years after approximately 90
billion
minutes of calls. In the early 2000s, a local call decreased by about 5
billion
less and
subsequently
went back to early rates which are about 70
billion
. A gradual increase occurred in the remained telephones. From 1995 until 2001, national and international calls made about 2
billion
minutes of call
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each year, and
finally
, a year later, it hit its highest point of just over 60
billion
.
On the other hand
, 4 years in a row from 1995, a mobile call had a slight growth of about 1
billion
calls every period and had a dramatic growth in the early 2000s climbing to around 15
billion
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • fixed line
  • mobile
  • local calls
  • national calls
  • international calls
  • trend
  • billion
  • minutes
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • plummet
  • outpace
  • transition
  • technology advancement
  • consumer behavior
  • market saturation
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