The charts below give information on the ages of the population in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections in 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the population in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections in 2050.
The data related to the age groups of the crowd in
Yemen
and Italy is demonstrated in the pie charts below, Over a 50-year span (2000-2050) comparing 2000 and foreseeable
population
in 2050. Considering
Yemen
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Yemen's
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Population
pattern, the highest
population
proportion is related to
children
and teenagers with ages between 0-14 (50%),
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by
adults
between 15-59 years old, respectively in both 2000 and 2050. The most
population
,
however
, is related to
adults
in 2050 (57%).
Additionally
, there will be a significant increase (11%) in the
population
of
adults
in 2050,
while
the
children
population
will experience a 13.1% decrease till 2050. And the number of elderly people
seem
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to change slightly with an increase of 2.1%. Turning to the information related to Italy, the highest amount of
population
is
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adults
with 61.6%
that
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which
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will decrease dramatically in 2050.
On the other hand
, the number of old people would swell from 24.1 to 42.3%. It’s predicted that the
population
of
children
may decrease to 11.5% (from 14.3% in 2000).
Overall
, the highest proportion of
population
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the population
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is attributed to
adults
in both countries over the span, except for
Yemen
in 2000, which is the
children
population
.
Furthermore
, the number of
children
in
Yemen
is significantly more than
Italy
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in Italy
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,
that
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which
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clearly demonstrates that
birth
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the birth
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rate is
more
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higher
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in
Yemen
while
the death rate is
more
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higher
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in Italy.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, population, children, adults with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • demographics
  • elderly population
  • workforce
  • dependency ratio
  • population projections
  • ageing society
  • youthful population
  • social services
  • health care burden
  • economic growth
  • fertility rate
  • life expectancy
  • pension system
  • immigration
  • sustainable development
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