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ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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describes
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 about changing numbers of people that travel abroad within 4 different years, 1990, 1995, 2000, and 2005. Based on the table, the total of people that do international
travels
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travel
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 is showing an
increasing
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 from 1990 to 2005. The number
is
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has
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 increased by around 250
million
of
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people in total. As
for
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the most popular destination was led
by
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Europe at the year of 1990,
then
 surprisingly Europe still
maintain
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 its position
through
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for
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 consecutive years up until 2005. On the other side, the least
prefered
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preferred
 destination is the Middle East,
only
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by
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9.8
million
of
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visitors and still
be
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the least
prefered
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preferred
 destination until the year
of
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2005 with 15.8
million
 travellers.
Besides
, almost all of these areas are doing
a positive changes
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, with Europe as the region that has the most differences in visitors.
However
, the only region that had
the
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fluctuative
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fluctuating
 changes in the
travellers
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number of travellers
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is
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in
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 America,
that
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which
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 was stably increased its travellers from 1990 until 2000
,
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 but shows a
decreasing
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decrease
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by
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of
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 5
million
of
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apply
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visitors
at
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in
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 the year
of
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apply
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2005.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "describes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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