The diagram below shows the process of producing smoked fish

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The

illuatration

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illustration

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demonstrates how smoked

fish

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produced

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is produced

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, it is fourteen stages,

man made

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, linear process and it begins with catching

fish

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to smoke them and ends with displaying

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them at

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fish

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shop shelves. First of all,

fish

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catched

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by a web and

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the

catched

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caught

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fish

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is transported to port within containers. After it is first

freezed

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frozen

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and

then

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thawed before adding into fresh water. After it

exposed

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is exposed

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to fresh water, it is cut

oppened

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open

in order to prepare for

salt water

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saltwater

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and yellow colouring exposure. After cut

oppened

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opened

fish

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is added into the environment, it

smoked

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is smoked

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through heating. Following that, smoked

fish

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is canned or boxed and

freezed

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frozen

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at zero Celcius before

adding

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being added

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cold

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store. Stored cans are distributed by tracks and they eventually

reached

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reach

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their final destination of

fish

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store shelves.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

135 words

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The diagram below shows the process of producing smoked fish

In some countries, more and more local shops are closing down because so many people now shop online. What problems might this cause? What is the best way to deal with this problem?

You recently applied for two separate jobs. Both have chosen to hire you, but you must write a letter to one of them explaining why you are unable to take the position. Include in your letter: – An apology – An explanation of your situation

In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

In some cities, there are few controls over the design and construction of new homes and office buildings, so people can build in whatever style they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?