sOME PEOPLE SAY hISTORY IS ONE OF THE MOST IMPORTANT SCHOOL SUBJECTS. oTHERS PEOPLE THINK THAT, IN TODAY'S WORLD, SUBJECTS LIKE SCIENCE AND TECHNOLOGY ARE MORE IMPORTANT THAN hISTORY, Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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I think every Add a comma
opinion,
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future
. Some people
say that History
is one of the most important school subjects it's true but it has to go along with
today's world which is science
and Technology
. How can we move without our history
, the people
behind us "The ancient people
" is
the most powerful Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
who pushes
us to move forward. Change the verb form
push
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taught us how to fire a light, How to find Correct your spelling
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other
and animals, How to survive and others. Of Correct pronoun usage
others
course
we wouldn't know that without them.
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course,
Science
and Technology
are important too. They give us a chance to move torward
with them.
Without Correct your spelling
forward
Science
and Technology
we're just Add a comma
Technology,
a
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apply
normally
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normal
humans
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human
being
. We spend our daily life with no useful. Without them we have no light we have no food, we have no comfortable stuff and things.
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beings
people
can survived
without these things. Humans Change the verb form
survive
creates
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invention
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inventions
an unlimited wants
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unlimited wants
an unlimited want
of
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to
people
based on a limited government.
May I gives
one example of the development of Change the verb form
give
science
and Technology
. With this
two things it give us a chance to be a member of ASEAN "Association of South East Asia Correct determiner usage
these
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" we can be able to communicate with the other 9 countries with the high Fix the agreement mistake
Nations
technology
it help
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helps
be
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apply
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it
can definitely hold on to that hope that in the near Capitalize word
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economics can totally achieves
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achieve
term
of political standing, culture and traditions but it's not a problem with our help I know that Fix the agreement mistake
terms
there're
a bright Change the verb form
there's
future
are
waiting for all of us. and Unnecessary verb
apply
that is
a reason why History
.
Science
and Technology
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We use History
to learn about others, their culture, their
tradition to Correct word choice
and their
be understand
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use
science
and Technology
to help us, our country, our
world to be moving forward, to help each other and to give a bright Correct word choice
and our
chances
and Correct the article-noun agreement
chance
future
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chance
up coming
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coherence cohesion
Ensure you have a clear structure with an introduction, developed paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion. Organize your ideas logically, connecting them with appropriate linking words.
task achievement
Fully address the task by discussing both views provided in the prompt and giving your own opinion. Ensure your opinion is clear throughout the essay. Provide relevant examples to support your points.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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