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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The double bar chart
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 the changes in average
accomomation
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accommodation
 prices in
five
 different
cities
 between 1990-2002 and 1996-2002 year durations compared with the average house prices in 1989. The first part of
bar
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the bar
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 graph mainly
provideds
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provides
provided
 information about
decrease
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the decrease
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of
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in
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five
 different
cities
 during 1990-1995,
while
 the second part of
bar
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the bar
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 graph indicates the increase
of
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in
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five
 different
cities
 during 1996-2002.
It is clear that
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London is expected to see the most dramatic changes in its
overge
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average
coverage
overage
 house prices which
is
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 reached well over 10 million euros, and Frankfurt shows the
decreaes
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decreases
decrease
 from 3 million euros to 1 million euros. There was an
upword
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upward
 trend over the period of 1990-2002 in all of the
five
cities
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words five, cities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • housing market
  • average house prices
  • trend analysis
  • price fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • year-on-year change
  • appreciation and depreciation of property value
  • benchmark year (1989)
  • significant increase/decrease
  • inflation-adjusted prices
  • real estate dynamics
  • economic factors
  • buyer's/seller's market
  • price index
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