The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the local governmental distribution
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different categories of
expenses
in 2010 and 2015. In general, there are two pie charts, divided
in
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nine various items of distributed
expenses
from the government, where four categories, namely Education, Healthcare, Pensions and Defense, have the largest
proportions
,
while
the
last
three
of
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items have the least one. Turning to the specifics, the
proportions
of the local government
expenses
in 2010 were the most significant for
four
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types of expenditure. They were Education, Healthcare, Pensions and Defense with 24%, 21%, 19% and 17% respectively. Notably, these items of governmental funding
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the biggest ones and they had
the
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similar shares in 2015 with a bit different
proportions
,
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were 21%, 20%, 19 % and 14%. As for the other two categories of
expenses
, following
after
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the largest ones mentioned above in both years, Welfare and Interest on borrowing did not change their places, having a slight increase in the distribution of state money in 2015 in comparison to 2010 with 13% and 10%
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. The
last
ones, Transport, Culture and leisure and
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had a slight decrease in money distribution and stayed
also
with the smallest
proportions
in 2015 with roughly the same percentage (1%).
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